Feedback for improvement

Order the web-log so that the film is the last entry, then the evaluation questions in order and then research and planning.

Research/planning

You have location recce with photos.  Role allocation synopsis, mind map cast, schedule,  the script needs to show conventions of scriptwriting  in layout and screen direction. 

When discussing target audience use audience theory such as uses and gratification and demographics. Use the You-gov web-site to really explore a target audience

You discuss why you changed your idea and need to make this a focus of the evaluation

You need a new storyboard and thorough planning

Go through the answers for the evaluation and add to them for the new one.  Explain that you have made two separate ones.

In terms of the film there is good continuity at the start of the opening sequence with a range of shots interior and exterior including an establishing shot..  Show this camera direction in your script.  Appropriate titles and use of sound to evoke atmosphere.   A range of shot types and distances are edited with good pace with clear continuity.  There are some nice touches with sound and editing which create eerie noises and enhance certain shots.

Weaknesses include the fact is all shot in one house whereas your previous film used exterior shots which showed skill filming movement. Could you merge the two films at all? Shots going upstairs are quite dark and could be cut although I understand this is building tension they could be quicker and tighter. The title of the film pops up during this and may be more effective at the start.  Research should have provided a template for an opening sequence, confidence with the form is still shaky in some respects rather than feeling intuitive. The titles all need to happen at the start of the piece and then get into the narrative. Need to consider lighting in some shots. The narrative seems to  peter out at the end. You need to make it clear that there is a boy at the top of the stairs.

Put a Warner Brothers and the Skeleton Productions logo at the start

Put titles at the start

Talk about showing an audience and seeing if the idea of a second child works.

I think the end needs an effect to point out the boy on the stairs