February feedback

You have chosen to film and edit a new sequence which is daunting and ambitious but is to be commended. I suggested that you film another short sequence to add to the first edit. I hope that your skills now allow you to achieve a higher mark for the production.  Impressive commitment.

Script

A normal house is seen during the night-time, in the window we see a woman. The woman is standing preparing vegetables when her knife slips and she cuts her finger. The phone rings and she picks up.

Woman: [raising phone to ear] hello?

Man: [out of view over the phone] hello! It’s me, how’s the new house looking?

Woman: [smiling against the wall] it’s looking like its slowly getting there.

Man: it’ll feel like home before you know it!

Woman: I guess so, I-

The woman cuts off as she hears footsteps running upstairs. She looks up to the ceiling, holding her hand over the phone.

Man: hello?

Woman: [raises the phone back to her ear] oh sorry, I think Stevie is messing up upstairs. I’ll see you later tonight.

Man: Okay… Bye…

The woman walks to the bottom of the stairs, turning on the light, and walks slowly upstairs with the washing basket, humming a song. She wonders into her son’s bedroom, ready to shout

Woman: I’ve told you to stop running in the house!

She notices no one is in the room with her. She goes through the wardrobe pulling out clothes. She turns around and doesn’t see a face hidden by shadows in the wardrobe. She exits the room; the face disappears back into the wardrobe. She searches all upstairs and realises he isn’t upstairs. She turns the lights on and off in each room, confused. She looks out of the window to see her son playing near a playhouse in the back garden.

Woman: [calls out window] how did you get down their so fast?

Boy: what? [carries on playing]

Woman: never mind… what are you doing?

Boy: playing with my new friend.

Woman: no one is there with you?

Boy: yes there is…

The woman shakes her head and goes back downstairs, turning off the lights. 

Creating a new opening scene

After watching back our opening scene "The Cellar" we realised that we could of done a lot better and had some much better ideas, so we decided to go ahead with our new ideas and create a new opening scene and re-create part of our blog.

 

To make sure creating a new blog was a good idea we had to make sure we did the following...

• Made a plan for time and what we were going to each day.
• Plan out the storyline.
• Made sure we had a location to film on.

After making plans and having a good chat we decided to create a new opening scene called "The PlayHouse".